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In a Cold Room by ~ghostchild:iconghostchild:

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This room's cold.
I kill the time
writing useless words,
avoiding work—
avoiding thought,
but still I think
of her and her smile;
why she won't speak,
why she won't call—
her cool indifference—
it's killing me
as I kill time
in a cold room.
©2004-2010 ~ghostchild
:iconghostchild:

Author's Comments

Just wrote this. Somewhat experimental for me. I tried to streamline down my ideas to the very basics of the situation, adding as little extra wording as possible.

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~moontears Jan 21, 2004, 11:01:51 AM
I like strong and short poetry...I love this one......:)


C.

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~overkil Jan 18, 2004, 12:59:29 PM
I had an english teacher that when you asked him how long a paper or essay should be he would say "as long as it has to be". If you could get your entire point across in a paragraph that was good enough for him. This poem says so much with so little, something that poses a problem for a lot of people. Congrats on the good piece i really enjoyed the read.

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~phaatnaan Jan 20, 2004, 10:45:55 PM
hooray for less is more mentality. i'm all for minimalism and this is a very good use of it. liked muchly

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